Author’s note: I am writing a character description piece and in the first paragraph I will describe the character and in the second I will describe his/her role in the story. Then I will talk about the effect they have on the plot.
Steven created his movies with passion and kindness as he strode on screen with his brownish skin tone and his short curly hair not moving an inch. He walked up to the camera and stopped then he walked away and came back at a different angle with his brown eyes fixed forward. Then he backed up and walked forward again. Each time he re-approached the camera he walked at a different angle. Eventually his mother came into the room and told him to come down for dinner. "Okay Mom I'll be down in a minute," He replied kindly.
In the book Steven is very important because he is the main character. He is accused of a crime he didn't commit and he needs to be chosen innocent or else he could spend the rest of his life in jail. And that is the last thing he would ever want to do. Also in the story there are 2-3 people who say he was helping in the crime but he wasn't even there that day. They want to blame it on him. Without Steve the book would be about the other criminals trying to get out of going to jail even though they committed a murder. And even though they would try their hardest they would still be guilty and go to jail for life.
If Steven was proven guilty he would go to jail and get beaten by the other prisoners and Mr. Evans and Mr. King would be free and who's to say they won't commit anymore murders. They might think: Oh we got out of going to jail so why don't we try to rob that other gas station down the road we could always get out of jail again. They would become a bar of soap, always slipping away.
i think it a to much of a summery, you could change this by revising the 2nd paragraph but everything else seems fine.
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